First stab at writing fiction, ever!

Being an obliging sort of gal, I've decided to answer my own Lois and Clark fanfiction challenge, and for the first time in my life, take a serious stab at writing fiction. 
<shivers>
So here's the first, very rough draft. Unbeta'd, unpolished and unveiled. 
I desperately need a beta reader, although I don't have any plans to post this on the LnC Boards until I'm done plotting out every detail. Any volunteers?
So, I'd be glad to have some feedback from you more experienced writers. I think all of the people in my flist have more experience writing fiction, than I do. Poetry? Yes. Essays? You betcha! Stories? <goes and hides behind a tree>
And now I'm attempting to write something like the Bourne Identity.
I am so screwed.
Anyway here it is:

( Woman in The Mirror )

  
Be kind! Be honest!